Hansel and Gretel by Talia W

Hansel and Gretel Revised
One sunny day there lived a family of three. There was a Father,a boy and a girl. The boy and girl's names are Hansel and Gretel. Hansel and Gretel both loved candy, ice cream, hot chocolate and all the fat food you can get! They loved fat food as much as a mouse likes cheese. In January their Father found a new girlfriend but she lived in another city. Today they were moving to their new Stepmum's house. Hansel and Gretel have been to this city before with their real Mum so they knew everything about that city.
They finally got there and dropped their bags off at their Stepmum's house. She looked like a witch all mouldy and ugly. She was as ugly as a ugly toad. They said to their father can we go to the mall because she looks scary. The father said yes. Their father was peckish. He was really hungry so he took some very crummy crackers to the mall. They got to the really crowded mall. The mall was as big as a ten story building and was as crowded as someone giving food to all the poor people in the world. Hansel and Gretel rushed into the mall and saw a really yummy lolly shop filled with heaps of candy and fat food and quickly sprinted to the beautiful shop without their father! "Oh no!" and continued "I've lost the kids who knows were they are in this crowded mall!" The father said in a worried voice. But Hansel and Gretel knew the mall inside and out so they didn't panic at all. All at once the father went searching for them and turns around and noticed the door was gone and saw the crumbs his crackers had left so followed them. The crackers were as crummy as toast. Then he got at a point where the crumbs had disappeared. He saw a old, mouldy poor man. He thought that looks like my girlfriend but man version. “Oh I am so sorry were these yours?" said the poor man. Oh its all right I was just following them to find the exit do you know where the exit is?" said the Father. The man said in a nice voice "Yea offcourse but I just have to make a stop at a shop just to go pick up my friend." They started walking. Then they went up this escalator no people were up there it looked scary looking.” Are you going the right way?" The Father said. The mouldy man nodded. They got to an old abandoned shop. Out of the blue the poor man put cuffs on the Father and chucked him in the shop. There on a throne was Hansel and Gretel's Stepmum."Darling why did you say no when I asked you to marry me? Well to bad your going to marry me Son put him in a cage while I get into my wedding dress and put some make - up on!" She shouted. "Oh so this is your plan to force people to marry you! And this is your son he looks exactly like you...." the Father said. The Stepmum replied "Silence!" The Father didn't even finish his sentence.

Hansel and Gretel saw the escalator and said in a exciting voice "That looks fun lets play on it!" So they ran to play and had fun as they got to the top of it they heard “Help any one there?" The voice sounded like their Dad's voice. They sneaked into the abandoned shop and saw their Dad trapped in a steel cage. He told them to do this really fast to switch the keys with the abandoned shop key and the one that opens the cage. Hansel went to get the shop key and Gretel went to steal the cage key. They both quickly changed them. Once they got the cage key they got their Father out and boiled their Stepmum and her son. Hansel, Gretel and their Father stayed in that city and always went to that very yummy lolly shop. They never saw that evil stepmum again and all lived happily ever after with lots of lollies.
THE END